For once, I have written my submission on a bill with enough time to spare to ... give you time to spot the typos ...
I thank the committee for the opportunity to make a written submission on [the] Harmful Digital Communications (Unauthorised Posting of Intimate Visual Recording) Amendment Bill ...
I am instead raising the following as something that the Committee may wish to think about, and seek further input [on] from departmental advisers.
(Unless you cherish a certain superstition about prepositions, in which case you'll need to untangle this yourself.)
... fixing an issue that will arise ~~is~~ in a small number of prosecutions ...
Pretty good actually, I didn't notice any additional points
(assuming the correction for the last one is to replace "is" with "in").
"as intensely personal questions around the affect the posting has" should be "effect".
"the biscuit tim?"
not to be confused with the tam